I just want to say that I’ve come a long way. This my first post and you can certainly tell. What can I say? I’m a working progress.
There. She watched as the figure slowly escaped into the darkness.
Then again it reappeared, but this time it hastily paced backed and forth from the street on to the sidewalk.
Her eyes followed its movements. The figure was much too far for her to make out exactly what it was, but it surely had a human form. What was it doing?
The figure continued to pace back and forth from the sidewalk onto the street. This went on for some long minutes, but suddenly it stopped.
It just stood there frozen for some long seconds. It knew it was being watched. She knew it was watching her. She glared at it with intrigue as it just stood there.
From the corner of her eye, she could make out some flashing lights, the headlights of a bus. It didn’t even glance at the direction of the approaching bus. The figure still was fixed on her.
Now the bus was approaching at a faster speed, but the figure remained situated on the street. It continued to watch her.
The girl became distressed and began to loudly bang her window to get the figure to move out of the way. It was all too late.
The bus had already run it over. She gaped at the sight. The events that followed were even more perplexing. The figure gradually arose from the ground as if nothing had happened. Nothing at all.
It returned to the same hauntingly, calculated movements of pacing back and forth and back and forth. Just as she was about to march outside, the figure stopped and watched her. It was still alive. Or was it? Or could it be that from the start it never really was alive?
She locked the door and closed the blinds. That was the first time she witnessed what she seemingly thought was an ordinary human take the form of a nonhuman thing.
You just get better and better
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Thank You. What do you think about this post? I see the potential but I don’t think it was there just yet.
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Well, yoyr writing has changed from just plain horror to the more psychological stuff. This makes it more intriguing,cand somehow or other you have turned it alk around so that the dark side that is within every one of us becomes more manufest. It gives us a kind of horror about ourselves too, to know what iw potentially within us. You are getting better and better at doing this. Not sure what, practicallly, you can do to thus one to realise its potential, but I think it is almost there. I feel maybe a bit longer. Maybe develop it a bit mire but I don’t know because doing too much could ruin it. Mi used to love all the blood a d gore that you had, but I read it from behind my hand sort if thing lol. But it was GOOD. I have never been a lover of hirror, but I found your stuff fascinating. Still do. And that probably doesn’t help much at all lol
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Thanks. I appreciate your feedback. I find that psychological horror is always the best. One of my current projects at the moment is a screenplay. I would love to send it to you (only if you have the time, of course)
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Ih my giudness. I am no expert on any of thus, never having read or watched horror before. You are welcome to send it though. Remember I am blind though, so it might take me slightly longer than nirmak ti read, but yeah, go abead. Sounds fascinating
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Ah, you are in for a treat. I love to read horror. Though I don’t as much as I desire. I’ll send it your way (just give me an email) and you can choose to read as much as you want. I find it miraculous how you are able to read my work and write your very own work. that is very inspiring. 😀
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Thankyou very much for those kind words. Yes, I will read what I can. You can send it to lorrainelewis48@icloud.com
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I’ll send it now. 😀
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That was good!
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Thanks. I think that was my first try at short story writing. I’ve gotten more into poetry now. And you know I’m still working on my screenwriting. 😀
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That’s something I’m going to try my hand at sometime this year. 🙂
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Ah, I’m sure you’ll like it 😀
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That was good. As for it being there, ask even the master story teller and they would say that their work need improvement. But it was very good for the first work. As for me, I have always been a fan of horror but not gore or excessive violence. Though both have their own audience. For me the and I strictly say for me the best horror is that plays with your mind on subconscious level crippling your mind rather than body. So it was close to that.😁
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Thank you. My interests vary in that I like gore but I also like the psychological aspect. What are your favorite horror films, if any?
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Well Dracula ofcourse.
And many vampire and warewolf movies
Sixth sense.
Mist
Elm Street first part
The shining and many more
Exorcist 1976
And Catwoman 😉
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Which Dracula? There are so many versions. Ah, yes the sixth sense and the shining. I like the excorcist too. But there’s something about the sixth sense that is just so right. I enjoyed the film very much I think the film would have fared well even without the twist. Films that contain no gore that I can think of and that are good are: The Others, The orphanage, Shutter Island (this is more so a thriller), 10 Cloverfield Lane. And Searching is on my to-watch list. 😀
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Oh the others . I remember this movie for one dialogue ” the cat got your tongue.
This is the only movie where I heard this phrase being used.
Dracula 1990 is my favourite for it is the first horror movie I watched. Shutter island was good too.
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Yep. I rememeber that. I need to watch the dracula 1990 version. I’ve seen bits of the one that came out in 1931.
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I think 1931 Dracula was a great piece. Bela lugosi was awesome.
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That was a great first post x
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Thank you. I’ve always been interested in the horror and mysterious from the start.
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